hmm ... i'm not one to criticize.

poetry is a means to express oneself and all i notice about your poem, style-wise, is that it seems like you're placing your jumbled thoughts and feelings in words, and just speaking straight from the heart and not really paying attention to your speech or your rhythm. i like what you said though. makes sense. i think everyone has that person that you just WISH you can reach something with, but never do ... that's my john, remember? :)